You know, reading these two stories back to back probably wasn't the best idea now that I think about it cause I feel like absolute shit. One was an emotional gut punch whose bruise lasted the whole story and the other was like a knife slowly being pressed into your chest like that one scene in Saving Private Ryan and you could only sit and watch as it slowly digs in deeper while you can do nothing to stop it. Just fucking shoot me in the face, this is the worst birthday surprise ever.
>>13312505Like the others have said, the feeling of unease and disgust that you managed to convey is absolutely spectacular in that horrifying kind of way. The way the story unfolds as it reaches its crescendo just off to the horizon is just incredibly compelling to the point that I can't turn my eyes off it even as it descends into such sickening scenes of debauchery. The Apple Of Her Eye was great but it was contained in the fact that it was written in greentext format so it felt more like a play by play of abuse, this however has no such restraint and your writing proves as much which impresses me just as much as it disturbs me.
My only complaints is that since this story is being filtered through Anon's perspective, the writing should reflect as such because there were one or two sentences that felt slightly off.
All in all, great work and I'm not looking forward to seeing the next chapters. Still gonna read them though.
>>13316769I just fucking reread Berserk so this is just full blown pain throughout. I didn't read the spoilers so I was completely caught off guard when the story veered off into something I did not expect. The mindbreak of the other Myths as the Nijis violated you was just pain especially as they screamed and begged for it to stop. Ame was the most painful one, the way she was forced to talk about her dreams of the future as she watches it being forcibly taken away was just brutal, Calli is a close second, seeing her cry and beg for it to stop in contrast to how she was at the beginning just made me feel horrible. The semi chub I had throughout the story was also pretty horrible not gonna lieAs your first foray into 2nd person works this is honestly pretty great, is this your first work here because I don't recall reading non 2nd person fics in the archive. Also, I think you're overreacting when it comes to the potential arguments if you post this on A03. If people use the representation of certain chuubas in a fic to promote tribalism then their opinions shouldn't matter in the slightest