>>47558775Not bad. I'm interested to see what the first installment of this story you have looks like. I think the grammar could use a little once over though. For example: "However, not every soul is pleased with that idea and escape form the Underworld."
Unless it's meant to be implied that any soul who doesn't want to be there escapes the underworld, it would flow better to to word it as they attempt it, rather than succeed indefinitely.
"try to escape from the underworld." Another proofread might help you find the sentences that could flow just a little bit better too. I got no hard opinions for or against the rapping reaper, but the flavor and potential of her lore is sometimes too good to pass up. Another potential piece of feedback if you intend to continue with a bestiary / journal styling, make full use of spacing formatting, like adding notes of just things like "weapons to have: 1, 2, 3, etc" or "Number encountered so far: 7, got a bad gash from number 4" There's a lot of fun things you can do to make it really eye catching while also sprinkling fun info here and there.
