>>12770600Well, in this case my issue is that you left a loose end in the form of me being able to find your scam. All the things I criticized need to be improved upon. Like no mention of it to anyone who isn't 100% in on it, especially not on a public forum, an entirely new writing style (and just taking good note of what your usual style is), as well as a more fluid integration of one's mental illness into the character.
