>>13640952>Stories like these risk having too much expositionThat's my greatest concern here because it was never meant to be fully fetched story.
>You should be careful with stuff like this though:I had some similar feedback already, but worded as a 'hard to understand beginning'. And well, combined with your opinion i'm convinced that true prologue about described stuff is necessary. Alas it would reveal too much that is to come so it's rather hard to write properly.
Also... I really like when reader knows as much as mc, and it was meant to be like a foggy dream/nightmare that you see some familiar stuff in a weird way.
>Basically avoid stating the obviousI'm in a weird spot where i don't know what reader is able to get out of the story. But yea i'm not too fond of the obvious. It was meant as an intro of sort so...
>I'm also better if I'm asked specific questionsThere is not much to ask about this part, well maybe whether the first part is a good starting point. As i said before there is always an option to extend it into a proper prologue.
>>13640959hmmmmm yea
I hope that this post wasn't too chaotic but i'm kinda short on time so.