>>17221716the vocals are really blown out and its hard to hear anything.
the songs don't sound distinct from eachother.
its hard to discern the melody and beat, both between the songs and also within the song. it almost sounds like theres a rhythm guitar and its making it hard to hear the guitar and drums. i would say that the drums and vocals aren't loud enough. paticularly on degeneration.
mentioning blackrock, 911, dancin gmen, etc, your just kind of name dropping stuff in the truther community, your not saying clever things.
heres an example of some of the best lyrics i have ever heard.
"the old man don't wanchu in the club
cuz yo pussy poppin starts fights in the club"
it describes a societal phenomenon where beatiful and attention seeking sexually promiscuous women can literally start fist fights between young man, and how this reflects a chaotic dark aspect of society and our human condition, and how with age, comes wisdom to see that from the outside in and recognize it for what it is instead of being a part of it, but by then its maybe a bit hypocritical to condemn it after being a part of it, so you don't make a judgemental comment, you just try to avoid it because you now recognize that its not good for society, and it says all that with two lines that barely say anything at all.
the key to lyrics writing is how much can you say while saying as little as possible.
you say way too much and explain way too much.
A cool song doesn't explain to you how the federal reserve works, it just has a single line that is funny and clever about how "we all know money is fake"
don't explain somethi9ng to the audience like they don't know, make a vague joking reference to something for the audience because they DO know. it comes across like you respect their intelligence and you have an inside joke together, rather then your condescending to them. if someone wants to learn about wut your talking about they will watch a 9 hour conspiracy documentary.
