>>3287042Could you make the text even smaller next time? It was almost readable.
You clearly are just brainstorming so I don't have a lot to add but here's a few notes:
- If you don't want to add details to something just don't mention it. There's no need to spend an entire paragraph just to tell the reader to imagine it for itself.
- Atlas' dad is called Dad? Really?
- Whys is Dad concerned about the storms?
- The way Atlas stands up to Tsunami was just too dramatic.
I'm not a writer so don't take this too seriously
