>>15351637I had mini croissants therefore I won not sorry
>>15351644Ok so uggghhh how should I start
Second part feels too chaotic like you didnt know on what to focus, the crash, the bear or the illegal deforestation
I also think you got bored midway or something because some actions feel cut off and also spotted some typpos
Not really what I expected the story to go. The deforestation operation was probably the right call but you wrote about it at the end. I tihnk the crash doesn't make much sense unless you wanted to involve the police which is relatively close to the zone but that could've been done another way (I think).
The bear feels off too sorry
