>>3480183Nine years? How long were you sitting down to write this and how often?
Even reading your intro, there are multiple mistakes. Your first sentence makes zero sense. In your second sentence, "boreding" like should be "boring," "dose" should be "does," and it looks like you started one sentence and then switched it halfway through to a different sentence. Honestly, your second sentence makes no sense, either. It's completely incoherent. It's extremely important that your intro is solid and captivates the reader, and yours is very hard to follow and error-filled.
Beyond the writing style errors, is this a fan fiction? Why would you devote so much of your life to a fan fiction? If you're going to go down that road, why not make something original? Nobody wants to read an epic length fan fiction.
I honestly think it's great that you're working on such a creative endeavor and putting so much time into it, but I think you need to focus less on output and more on both writing style and content. I'd say maybe starting from scratch with a completely fresh idea where you focus on making sure that it's stylistically sound would be a good idea. Maybe finding a friend to be a proofreader, as well?
