>>3275123Walp, that's an interesting attempt, even if it is also definitely flawed. A couple of notes:
>solid music, not entirely surprising if the whole video is built around it according to the description but still worth noting>interesting approach to color in some scenes, the purple in the bedroom works really well when contrasted with the computer screens - though, with that said, the rest of that bedroom looks really bland and sure as hell could use some set dressing>like >>3275154 said, the digital effects are neat but the practical ones look really cheap and tacky in contrast, people are probably not going to be walking around wearing virtual reality headsets and random pieces of plastic stuck in their rear necks when 2077 comes around>the writing isn't all that bad for ~3 minutes of video, the idea of someone wanting to get organic eyes is at least compelling in theory and does make sense for the setting, but then again, you haven't exactly sold us on that setting to make it entirely credible either>your shot composition feels really bland and generic, take more time to plan out your shots until they actually express something about your narrativeOverall, it feels really tacky and cheap but but there's at least the hint of some technical knowledge in there. It probably isn't going to any festivals but hey, you could try spamming every free one in FilmFreeway to see if anyone finds it appealing enough to be exhibited in a selection of student shorts or else.
>>3275489God, no, please do not bring this cancer to /p/.
