Part 1.
>>3121671This would have been better as a portrait orientation, a bit tighter in, higher exposure. She looks bored.
I'd suggest having this one as a 3/4 shot in stead of a wide environmental; you'll still have the buildings in the background and the rail around her.
Then the general list. The general list will be for pretty much all the photos. This one has OK white balance, at least comparatively.
>>3121672This composition is just boring. The surrounding environment adds nothing as poorly lit as it is.
I get what you're trying to do, but here's where it's falling short:
If you exposed the image how it should be despite the lighting conditions, the overhead lights would be completely blown out.
That shot would be better earlier in the evening, when there is more light from outside. You might have to make arrangements to have the lights on at that time, depending on timers and what-not.
The strip of overhead lights looks like it is growing from her head. She needs to be much closer to the door; it will frame her better and add plenty of separation to the ceiling. There will still be plenty to have a good environmental texture.
Maybe consider shooting a little wider and getting closer, or using a longer lens and getting farther back. Your model is a bit lost in the scene.
>>3121674This one is a bit better, though exposure is still much too low.
The model looks stiff and uncomfortable. Hands in the pockets is not flattering to anyone. It's like she doesn't know what to do with her hands.
She needs to be better separated from her immediate surroundings, or positioned differently. There is not nearly enough interior context in my opinion. The droplets on the glass are nice, but the pole to the right is distracting. The post she's leaning on looks like it's growing from her head.
More to come ...
