>>5691486>First off, calm your tits QM.tits = calmed;
>Secondly, this to me seems less of a narative problem and more of a "read it until you get it" situation.the thing is when trying to understand what a nigga said takes too much effort and then the payoff isn't worth it. been re-reading my stuff a bit and i think it does take some effort to tie things up
>>5691488>Jeez, didn't mean to throw you in that much of a loop.no, no, you have to. even if i over react. i spent years with a gf who never told me shit was wrong until shit was over, so i'd very much rather have shit flung to my face (shit as in, insights and observation regarding current events)
>And hey, it may just be me being a dumb cunt, you know?that's isn't case for neither of you, but I also think that, although i have much to improve, we all have inherent preferences when it comes to communication (some get stressed when juggling too many topics at once, others can't stay in the same subject for more than ten seconds, etc). writing something anyone can/wants to read is the hardest shit in the galaxy, but it is worth striving for
>Well there was that part where the two in the labyrinth weren't sure about where an obvious enemy was compared to them.nah they got kinda lost too. i assumed that, if rita could see the enemy, then that could only mean that she was facing it, but even if it does seem obvious when i say it picking these details apart one after the other isn't easy. the line between 'too obvious' and 'what the fuck nigger' is thin
>and the moment I take my eyes off the Erimena update I forgot anything that was said beyond the summary you provided after.that's because 3/4 of my updates are fucking around, but y there is something like too much meat and too little bones (meat as in content, bones as in structure)
>>5691512>Jumping off what the others have already said, I think you should start by taking a deep breath-nothing's on fire here and we're all working on this together, right?im not upset. if shit is wrong you ask whats wrong and you fix it, if you can't then that's it. one way or the other, if you did your best theres nothing to worry about.
>but instead maybe trim who's talking in the scene a bit.>s a QM myself I find that while having lots of voices adds to a chaotic atmosphere, I think it's also prudent to not overload dialogue for the sake of dialogue.thats the feedback i was after. there is a pattern. having your players that are also qms on their own giving feedback is what makes qst a goldmine to me, great to keep you humble
>In short, don't sweat it, OP. We can meet you halfway and read closer as long as you keep answering our questions.i know. im not aiming at perfection from any side cause perfection brings stress and then what's the point? as long as we keep negligence from lying roots it good
if it came out like attentionwhoring then maybe i deserve it, but i think it was worth it.
also no post lawl momma came to town
