(Thanks to RQM
>>6306025 for this recommendation!)
I had a look it is certainly very different and unique, I am not sure what to call it, almost some completely original genre of "Administrative Fantasy"? or Bureaucratpunk? ADMINPUNK !
I have some critiques, just based upon my own obsessive individual preferences, feel free to completely discard them lol I hope I am not being harsh
Firstly, the author has constructed a nuanced and believable negotiation scenario, not immediately wormholes or lasers etc, it is an intimate "individual-scaled" tone, I applaud this restraint in perspective as too often sci fi tends to just leap ambitiously into GALACTIC STELLAR ENGINEERING and loses the humanistic suspense to drive the story. It gives the feeling that the author is very controlled and measured in unfolding the events!
I scanned the story for the word "wages", unbelievably for the setting of space syndicalist miner trade union the word never occurs? What money or remuneration do they even use? This seemed bizarre to me - It is the future, is there an exotic currency or indentured life system / debt obligation? How can you be a future trade union space miner, and never dispute pay or working conditions?
Another thing I would have expected - subcontracting. The story mentions "the military" the Galactic Federation, I feel this is a bit of an overused sci-fi genre fallback. It seems strange because the author refers to fragmented syndicalist factions, leaders at other outposts, why is the Galactic Federation the monopsonistic monolithic buyer of all labour? Surely it would also be subcontracted and decentralised and unaccountable, myriads upon myriads of private military contractors etc to disperse the responsibility of any unseemly enforcement actions etc.
The way I would then model the government is they are very distant and remote, perhaps they enforce some regulated rate of return or production quota upon the miners, with no understanding of the burden of work involved - they just leave it to the mercenary military contractors to collect... it is a sort of principal-agent problem hehe, I feel this is more realistic than "the Galactic Federation".
More factions, more!
I noticed some anons mentioning they want to see more about the mining equipment, tech etc. eg
>>6303808 I agree, I would like to see
more wild sci-fi ideas here. What if the outpost is on some hollowed out space elevator that links two halves of an asteroid, or it is suspended above the raging cryovolcanoes of a turbulent gas giant? Mention this just once in passing, and it will be incredibly memorable. Are there robots, mining drones?
Overall the game feel is very unique I actually have a lot more thoughts but I am very impressed by the author's vision, you should definitely continue on with your game world theme it is very promising!
