>>6027127Sweeeet!
>>6027129Cocoa, that ghost story wasn't scary at all! It needs the little details, first-hand accounts, creaks and groans the elevator makes, shadows in the flickering lights, the button to the sixth floor lighting up three times, so annoying but doesn't this school have three floors? I want some mystery, the little details that mean little on their own should clue us in on what her deal is, having it all layed out there like that kills the interest deader than the girl what died!
You really need to work on your rakugo routine, any story can be a performance. As of right now, you don't even what she's got in the bag, but she's for sure got it more than you! Git gud!
>>6027132>Now I don't wanna do anything else as nasty as that critique besides kissing! C'mere!>D. Gee lesbos, how come Shenron granted you TWO kids?>E. I love your performances so much and want to watch you make Marjorine go "I can't believe it's not meeeee!" I'm rooting for you! 