>>44906690>>44906699Thank you for the actual, solid feedback as opposed to the usual "die". I mean it.
>ArtImma be real. It's been a really nasty habit. Too much 'comfort zone' (and frankly it's earned me alot of commission work). I really wanna take a previous anon's suggestion and make more dramatic/action scenes and give the cheezeball a break for once. It's refreshing to get the actual firm slap of "hey, give it a fucking rest you fucking coomer".
>deconstructionIt was more for making a fun story for the sake of it than actually a deconstructive effort on the frankly shallow duality of the typical pokemon game's plot (the disconnect between beating the bad guys and becoming champ; one feeling like a sub plot to the other where they may stand stronger on their own). But I do want to do something with 'by the end of the part, Dawn's hated' which leads to her struggle to become a real hero. The way I wanna handle Dusk ironically becomes alot stickier, despite the frankly more straight-forward path, what with there being a connection to Dawn's at a later point. I do, however, have a character that fits that unchampion-like role. Thing is, that never gets resolved. No one gets closure on it. I suppose what I'd want to say with Dawn and Dusk's part 1 is more that if you make your bed, you're going to have to lie in it. Sometimes shit just hits the fan and things go wrong, and despite good intentions, no one will like you for it. I feel as though that could leave the parts with an ending and also still leave room for growth and hope in a second part.
Of course, I'm no writer. That much is obvious. What I have needs alot of work and retooling. Probably why I'm so much of a bitch to actually finally put it all together.
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