>>25042047Since I was one of the anons to request this, I might as well give some feedback.
First off, the errors I noticed on my second reading of it:
>In paragraph 1, Absol has a rat in her mouth. However, in paragraph 2, that rat is now a fish. Furthermore, it turns back into a rat in paragraph 8.>In paragraph 5, "t" should be "it" in "No bother, he'd brush t out later." Also, "know" should be "now" in "As for know, he...">In paragraph 6, "Mercy" is capitalized when it shouldn't be. There should be a space before the "She" in "She continued to lay...". In the same sentence, "stands" should be "stance". There should also be a period at the end of said sentence.>In paragraph 8, the ending thought "'She's at least deserved that'" is both a little awkward and should end in a period. "deserved" should probably be replaced with something like "earned".Given the fact that you wrote this at 3 in the morning and on such short notice, it was pretty okay.
It probably would have been a reasonable decision to write it after a good night's rest, but I admire your dedication. 