I'm working on a a fic with assorted depictions of torture by a secret society of trainers because why not. It's intended to be a mindless fapfic, nothing deep is going on here. But I would like to hear thoughts before I move on to second draft. I already have a ton of changes in mind but I'm worried there's a mistake I'm consistently making.
https://pastebin.com/KBWWaXcgIt alternates between Victor and Gloria's perspectives every few thousand words or so. The fourth part is incomplete but I should have it done tonight or tomorrow.
Also I copy/pasted this all from google docs and pastebin didn't want to do half of the indentations apparently.
