>>20029939What you are doing, IMO, is WORDS WORDS WORDS. You spend way too many words on inconsequential shit just to fill up some quota of yours.
See this comic? That's what your writing is like in comic form. Your words have no substance. They're there and mean something ,but don't contribute to the story itself.
>Through some sort of mysterious aura power, a vaguely bone shaped club or a staff of some sort took shape in the Pokemon’s hands. Upon its form being complete, the Lucario took a firm grip of it and imitated the stance the man himself had made, a serious glint in its eyes calling him out for a duel.Here's how I would do this, for example.
>Through some sort of mysterious aura power, a vaguely bone-shaped weapon formed in the Pokemon's hands. When it finished as a large polearm, the Lucario gripped it firmly and imitated the man's stance. The serious glint in its eyes dove into the man's, beckoning him for duel.I don't claim to know this best, but what I know you SHOULD do is get reading. Read Ernest Hemmingway's collection, read Ray Bradbury, read Nabokov's Lolita, read Kafka, read. Your language looks like it's from an alien, who's studied it but has yet to actually understand how to use it.
