>>23512064My suggestions might cause an extension to your story, but if you are aiming for the hurt/comfort kind of plan, give a little insight as to the healing process Greg went through after mother's death (with support of Ampharos). Maybe focus a bit on Amphy's view of having to care for a broken soul for that month. Basically, emphasize a bit more on the hurt trainer felt and the comfort Amphy provides to heal him
I don't know how you can improve with the smut part since writing it in general is just awkward, though I hear foreplay is more important than the actual copulation.
