>>31331081Yeah I already felt that way about the sentence structure and paragraph length, it triggers me too but I know people will have an issue if I broke them up too often.
It's an issue I recognize and can fix just haven't wrote anything in a while.
Writefag from 2013 when x & y came out I got something softer more vanilla for both you and the guy not liking rape if you wish to see it, it's when I was at my "peak" before my want to write died and has the pacing/paragraph length you could wish for in a fic.
It is however yuri of Serena and Shuana so if you don't like it I'm sorry https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9908706/1/The-Fireworks>tfw no longer have a larger image that someone made specificly for this fic anymore 