I've got a question for anyone who has the time to burn on reading something without much context or relevance to this board. I threw out a new fic for a /co/ thread I frequent, and for once the general consensus I've been getting was that my prose was far too purple. Now I didn't really notice this even while proofreading through the third time around, and I'm wondering how it would be that I could fix that issue so people don't get cold feet. It was just how my brain was processing words at the time. Like, if the style wasn't present in fanfiction but instead an original piece, would it be digested differently or what? /co/ doesn't have a writethread anyways.
The source is probably foreign, but that doesn't really have much to do with my pretentious bullshit.
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