>>22121130Ok you blend the shading too much in some areas, for example the left hand became blurred, same with the hair, try leaving your line art above your rendering, that should help you see how things are going out of shape.
another thing is you didn't apply the center of gravity correctly, it looked like that he was gonna fall back. As you see im my red line i moved him forward a bit and raised his head.
the eye is not that complicated, if you are trying to emulate sugi's style then i left you an example.
