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This'll be the first time I've ever actually tried writing something for the sole purpose of other people reading it.
I don't expect it to be good, but when completed, I'll post it here or in the next /vpwt/.
Would it be possible for a few people to give me some constructive criticism when I eventually post it?
Closest I've come to having people read my work is my English teacher in year 11 put some story I wrote in the yearbook so this won't be too topnotch, but I'd really like to improve.
Currently my biggest problem is leaving the first person. I'm not sure how to describe how things respond if I'm supposed to be writing from the narrators perspective.
For example
{first person thoughts blah blah blah}
“Brutus man, it’s just you and me.”
The little Skorupi chattered in agreement.
{back to first person thoughts blah blah blah}
Does that work? How should I be formatting this?