>>55511462Not bad. I think the dialogue is good for the most part, and there are some good descriptions in the narration. And this kind of pair has potential to be interesting. I'm pretty sure it's a unique dynamic compared to the rest of the guild members.
However, I feel like their personalities should be fleshed out a bit more, so I'd suggest exploring that in future stories. I also thought the pacing was a bit too fast in some parts (like when she learned to fly or when they arrived at the town). And there are some mistakes with punctuation and capitalization in quotes, so you may want to review grammar rules for that sort of thing. For example:
>“I’ll admit, a break from people does sound nice.” She repliedshould be
>“I’ll admit, a break from people does sound nice,” she repliedLastly, just for the sake of making it easier to read, I'd suggest adding an empty line between paragraphs so that the story doesn't look like a big wall of text.
Actually, one last thing: I find it funny how she learns to fly on her first try, because one aspect of my character is that it took him a long time to learn how to fly. He'd be so jealous if Mandibuzz told him how easy it was for her, lol>>55504467>Are Bug-type Pokemon super-strongI think I've touched on this aspect in my stories before, since Booker is a bug. I imagine Bug-types are stronger than you may expect, compared to other types of Pokemon. From what I understand, the fact that IRL bugs have an exoskeleton contributes to their strength, and Bug-types probably have exoskeletons too, so that would make them stronger.
