>>55372638the line art and color work on this is actually very solid. in terms of the anatomy issue, i think the problem is that you were actually a little too faithful to the reference pic (which was of a real person with realistic proportions) with respect to rem's jaw and neck, while otherwise using a very anime/not realistic proportions for the rest of her features (ex. very large eyes and head, very small shoulders, etc). attached redline is my attempt to even out the proportions
also, this isnt relevant from a construction perspective, but i think maybe your pic was inverted across the y axis? i think each character's bangs are supposed to be covering the opposite eye than what's depicted here
