>>17148753Thank you.
I'm thinking of re-doing a lot of it, I feel as if their conversation was lacking and I don't like the idea of just jumping into the sex.
Roxie's offer won't change, though, because if the story ends up being well-received I could possibly do a mini-series out of it.
I just want the thing to have some plot and be more than just sex.
I don't want to be "surpassed in ability" by someone else just because I don't do more plot than pounding, so I need to work on it. 