>>12854483Not bad at all, I say. This first chapter, I found, didn't really have a lot of substance, but the writing wasn't bad. Your synopsis also is very minimalistic and while giving off a kind of intrigue, doesn't really describe anything about what the story is about or what the reader can look forward too or expect from it.
>There was a mirror, which served to remind him of how ridiculous he looked in a dress shirt and tie.I like how instead of just stating how a character looks, you integrate it into narrative or dialogue. That makes it flow and make it sound more natural as well.
Not bad. Could do better with more length and descriptions, though, Best of luck to you.