Okay, so buizel anon here. I got the first chapter finished, I think:
https://rentry.org/buizel1I've read and reread this thing and I don't think I'll ever be completely satisfied. Feedback is appreciated. I spent a stupid amount of time editing and I'll try to be a bit more efficient with the later ones. I already have a lot written, so hopefully they'll be out faster
Also drew another character from it. I'm trying to get more comfortable with that so I can eventually make real art with them