>>19054115>>19057551ignoring the plot points that I just disagree with (because I'll just vote against them anyway) and ignoring the champ involvement (which I can't complain about until we actually have a confirmed champ) I have a few comments:
1) I don't understand what's going on with the Stella encounter, why doesn't she trust the evil team? and exactly what 'building' does the player enter?
2) I'm not a fan of the evil team being at 3 locations all packed together so close (observatory/building/scrapyard) I think you could easily remove at least one of those encounters. I mean, you have a bunch of shit happening between the first two gyms, and then almost nothing for 3 more gyms... it just seems poorly paced
3) Also, I don't really understand the evil teams motivation at this point, I know you keep saying "philosophical shit" but it's really unclear. perhaps you're just trying to make a generic plot that might fit into any villain background, but I don't think it's working out the way you planned.
While I dislike most of your overall plot choices, I think if you handled them better and clarified some things I would at least vote 'this plot is okay' when it came time to survey.
