>>43124349Haha it would be a great prank if I'm getting out my art supplies and really did draw this whole thing and post it to the drawthread when it's done haha
Would tickle everyone's funny boners haha
>>43125063>You really need to tighten this up. It takes too long to tell for the joke to be worth it.Some of the details are extraneous like going to town, but not much could be cut.
>Also, last sentence is a flat tire. Your punchline is "blew a seal" so everything atterwards is wasted.Can't change the punchline because the original joke this is based on (the penguin ice cream joke) had the same type of punchline.
Part of the humor is the reader knowing the original joke and wondering how this joke will end differently.
