>>30097537I'm happy to hear my feedback and commentary hasn't just been aimless rambling. Sometimes I feel like it is, but if it's helped you, then that makes me feel a lot better.
Speaking of feedback, have some more.
I looked over the additions to chapters 6 and 8, and finished chapter 9. I think the additions did nicely in terms of fleshing out Cathy and Steve, and chapter 9 was also good. It felt like an effective conclusion and wrapped everything up well. I also liked the comfy/snuggly parts.
I'm a sucker for those types of scenes.I really can't think of anything to critique besides the following typos.
>but paused and reached out to grasped her clawShould be either "reached out to grasp her claw" or "reached out and grasped her claw"
>"I guess he has," she said, still looking towards she could plainly see it for herself, though to his human eyes the fox's silent stare revealed nothing, inspired a note of jealousy.Something's not right about this sentence grammatically, but I don't know what exactly. You might want to double check it.
>She pushed her head out of his grip and nuzzled his cheek>Alata pulled back from Michael's shoulder "Sorry?">"I told you I was done with that. I was going to help," he subvocalizedMissing periods.
>Nola face lit up like she'd won a prize.Should be "Nola's"
Also, I think I remember you saying that you stayed up all night to write chapter 9, or something along those lines. I'd like to point out that I don't think the chapter suffered for it. I also want to advise you to please not do that again, if possible. Sleep's more important than writing, though I admit it sounds crazy.
And that's about it. Y'know, I remember when I started reading Big Shoes to Fill way back when, before I even started using a name here. It's been a while since this story began, but I'm glad I got to follow along and read it to its conclusion. Good show, Ee4ee. I look forward to--and wish you luck on--your next story.
