>>28474397Alright I ran the thing though Hemingway app to get rid of some of the examples of passive voice it pulled up.
Don't know if it fixed everything and considering how it is 1am right as I type this. I'm too tired to sift though the entire thing I have written for examples so I'm just gonna post a new version here.
http://pastebin.com/TFz8kCj2Hope I'm not spamming these threads too much with this shit. 