>>17890566Even if I said I wouldn't do so, I still corrected the obvious stuff mentioned in
>>17902738 which means punctuation, and changing verbs in narrative sentences to past tense. It's by no means perfect, maybe there are some points where the use of present perfect was a bit abusive/not needed/not relevant. But after re-reading I notice why it was difficult to read. I also added spaces between paragraphs and dialogues: Word 2013
no I didn't pay for it automatically adds space so I didn't notice how cramped it was in the PasteBin. Maybe at some points there will be a bit too much space. Hope it's a bit better now.
>http://pastebin.com/k9DdQdcA 