>>53640924Amazing job! This certainly doesn't seem like your first time writing a story--I thought it was really good. I enjoyed seeing Duskull's thought process and reactions to things, and the way he experimented with moves was cool. It's also interesting how becoming a ghost has apparently altered his personality to make him aggressive and mischievous (Chespin's latest story had a similar idea, funnily enough).
Speaking of Chespin, Duskull's meeting with Wooper was great. The gif there is my favorite of the images you included--but I loved them all, honestly. They add a lot to the story.
And I love how you managed to incorporate the rickroll one you drew a while back... but upon closer inspection, it seems like you edited it to include Booker's shattered slingshot. Very cool detail. I like it.Also, my favorite scene was the one with the mirror. That was very well written.
My main critique is that you forget punctuation a lot, specifically with quotes and thoughts (the italicized parts in parentheses). So you may need to review that subject more. Also, there are a couple typos here and there, but nothing major.
So, great work overall. I hope to see more stories and art out of you in the future!
>>53641620lmao
Poor Skiddo. He always has it rough.
>>53642072I haven't given that topic much thought. Maybe each day would have three meal periods that last an hour or two (or three), and people can get their food anytime during those time periods. I'm not sure if it would be practical to have food available around the clock, whenever people want it.
