>Who wants to read about Kiawe buttfucking Olivia?Fair. The emphasis was supposed to be the voyeurism aspect of it. So maybe that was a mistake.
>I'd say the lack of direction is what's at issueYeah I realized from some previous comments that openly admitting that I'm making this up as I go and asking for suggestions/ideas was not a good look. To be blunt I only know how to write by flying by the seat of my pants. Sometimes I have an ending in mind but even then I don't know what happens on the way. This is just how I write. I'm not saying it's a good idea.
>I care about the narrativeWell that's a problem because I assumed nobody would give a fuck about a narrative. This was supposed to be a one-off originally and I figured if it morphed into a genuine attempt at storytelling then people would just roll their eyes. So I was just writing this as a series of sexual scenarios. I count Dawn watching people fuck and wishing it was her as a scenario. Having more futa sex in the next chapter was another scenario. Chapter 5 doesn't have any sex in it yet and I'm not sure if it's even going to, so maybe a narrative is forming anyway.
>it was only right that Kiawe would be nextNah. We skipped Ilima at the start and we did Mallow out of order. This isn't "Dawn has sex with all the trial captains, in order: The Fic" and it was never going to be. To be honest, Dawn having casual sex with some buff dancer guy doesn't really interest me. I think Kiawe is lame and I have no interest in specifically catering to the blacked fetishists. But Dawn being really thirsty and getting shut down and left horny was fun to write.
>Clearly the intention of an expressed futafic was to involve the full Alola trio.No? I don't watch the anime, I only know these characters from Sun. Those three, specifically, aren't even really a trio to me. The original intention was just to write a fic where horny Dawn creampies Lana due to the Gods' manipulation.
>>54509561no u
