>>32512300>>32524128Mimiga, you write like Jim Theis. I've read a lot of your stuff, and I can safely say that you've gotten worse over time. Your cute stuff is really cute. Your lewd stuff is also pretty nice, and even your melodrama is tolerable to me (and I usually hate melodrama; you keep it engaging enough to hold my interest nonetheless).
When you write the way that you do, with so much extra fluff added to every other sentence, it's tiring - tiring to read, and no doubt it seems to me tiring for you to write. Give this a read through (as far as you can stomach, and then just a bit more) and perhaps reconsider your excessive use of adjectives and adverbs.
http://ansible.uk/misc/eyeargon.html 