I tried drawing another thing.
Did someone order an Oran Berry?
>>53509475>grimy foodThat's gross. I'm not eating that. I'll throw it at my enemies instead.
>do you use Pokemon that you've recritedI always try to use my hero and partner, but I bring along recruits whenever I can.
>take your time and do the side quests?I do, unless I start feeling bored and want to progress the story.
>choose to stay or leaveI really don't want to abandon my family, and I love the conveniences of the modern world. But the PMD world is so alluring...
>(Okay I'm running dry on questions here, please come help!)I'll be sure to give you some ideas if I come up with any.
>why were the Timegears given to the lake trioI distinctly remember being confused by this, but it's been too long since I played the game, so I can't make any theories about it.
>>53510011There are quite a few comma splices and run-on sentences, and some misspellings... but aside from that, it's not bad. It's a nice intro for the character. I like how he seems a bit greedy. And it's an interesting idea to make it cross over with a canon game.
This makes me realize we never agreed on when our storyline takes place relative to the canon games, though.
>>53511193This is also not bad. The writing could be a bit better on a technical level; in particular, I think you need to use more commas. But the description of Macom figuring out his body is written rather well. Also, the glimpse of his human life is very intriguing, and I'm curious to learn more.
>>53512539Another good story. I didn't expect someone like Chespin to get soused, but it was fun to see him acting differently than usual, and I think you wrote it well.
I also like how low-stakes all of Chespin's quests are. He's not going on any big adventures--he just wants simple things like a bed, blankets, or sweets. It makes these stories feel a bit comfy (if you ignore the combat, of course).
