>>56452262>Growlithe-anonhttps://rentry.org/summerfestivalstayhomeThe plot was good, and Bill's fears and concerns sounded believable. You mostly did a nice job with the prose and dialogue, though there were some parts I thought were confusing or hard to follow (but maybe it was just me). The climactic concert/singing scene was nice, but I especially enjoyed the opening scene with Gill and Porygon. It felt casual and realistic, with good "slice of life" vibes.
>Carrot-anonhttps://rentry.org/carrot-hazel-summerThe dialogue was alright, but the grammar needs work. Also, I highly suggest writing speech normally (Carrot said, "blah blah blah.") instead of using a "script" format (Carrot: blah blah blah.) because using a script format can look sloppy unless you're writing a screenplay.
>IV-anonhttps://rentry.org/zangoosefestivalGreat job writing Mustel's personality and behavior, and conveying how stressed he feels about the festival and dealing with people. The fight scene was cool
although it did feel a bit unnecessary, since it probably could've been avoided if they just handed over the missing item immediately. Also, the ending was pretty comfy, and a good way to wrap up the story
especially with the final appearance of Ogerpon, which made for a nice resolution. 