>>56159906>grammatical weirdnessCare to elaborate? I'd appreciate any tips, be it of grammatical nature or regarding vocab, if you'd be so kind.
>narrativelyI guess I could've easily fit in a time skip between chapters.
I love good romance and slow development, but it didn't seem fitting for a dynamic which begins with being raped. But I understand where you're coming from.
It's the first piece I've managed to complete, third that I've started. I wanted to get something done at least, that I could learn from and improve on
I'm in two minds about 2nd person PoV, a bit too many (you)s don't you think? 