>>56981174>>56981503I do think your paragraphs are noticeably a longer on average, but they're not SUPER long. Just be more conscientious about making longer paragraphs.
I think the main thing that makes your writing hard to follow is the placement of your images. Key word here being "placement". The way you insert the images is very sloppy and rushed, you don't even bother to try to integrate them into the writing, which leads to moments such as this that are immersion breaking because of a huge break in the writing. You're just flat out interrupting your writing to show an image. I HIGHLY suggest hyperlinking images into sentences, but if you autistically insist on putting them front and center, at least try to scale them and wrap them around text.
