>>28443364>>28443405Thanks for the input. I may just end up rewriting all of the parts with Ray in it, fixing a pacing issue..
As for descriptions issue, I have to agree. I still have along way to go with that stuff.
Also I'm pretty sure I wrote somewhere that his apartment was more barren if anything, but a sty in the sense where there are still boxes all over the place due to him being too lazy to unpack them.
Also not sure if I have ever given Ray a exact age. There is something else I need to add in.
As for what you said having Ray go through a simmilar choice as the Gallade. I think you are onto something. I was really wanting to make him a bit more in depth, and not the snarky person he is. But at times I also feel like that sort of thing is more limited by my lack of skill when it comes to this sort of thing.
And as for the Gallade being "corrupted." I kinda feel like that is the route that is going to be taken no matter what. Reason being is the fact of him adapting to a new environment. And the fact that he is still rather childish at times.
Anyways thank you for your input, as I'm sure you already know I am shit at this and every little bit of input counts. And I will probably end up restructuring the entire story after this to make it a bit more cohesive.
