>>56814383>Bibi ReviewWell, Bibi, you were right, it would be good for you to do some proofreading. You have a funny way of describing things, "canine bearing grin" is an interesting way of describing Bibi's smile and I do think that it's accurate to compare her to a chihuahua, and it's also funny how you describe a 4X weak to Fairy Pokemon as having things in common with them. Maybe there's something I'm missing, but Bibi to me speaks in a sort of "country" way, despite being from Paldea. She's the kind of character that I both want to hug the shit out of and beat the shit out of. You do a good job of characterizing her as annoying with her run-on manner of speech and I also like the way that you got Koa to "Challenge" Bibi.
Nyx and Rina are interesting despite being yuri. Rina speaks in a... sophisticated manner? It seems like you were trying to make her seem "mysterious" in conjunction with her monotone voice and dubious origins while also having a humorous side with the "5 star hotel" line. I don't actually mind the constant "..." on Nyx's part and I'm assuming that's done with the intent of making her seem uncertain, which is done well enough. The tone shift between sappy romance and The Trial is interesting. I find it funny how just the question of why she was attempting to do the trial caused her to string her words together. Don't take that out when proofreading. I think it would be funny if she did that more often. You seem to really like Pokemon metaphors/analogies. I like the cliffhanger quotes as well.
I don't actually read manga so the thing you made was actually kind of my introduction to it. I'd be lying if I said that I didn't have to get used to reading from the left. The cover page is really funny as a result of being left open to interpretation. You did a good job of making Bibi's personality show manga-wise, especially in the "I'm In Despair" panel. I still don't get it but that's probably not the intent anyway. Good Stuff, was worth the wait.
