I fininshed the chapter! Sorry if it took too long. Here's a link to chapter 1
http://pastebin.com/pN14kXp1I'm sorry if the chapter is short I just don't want any of you guy think I'm dead.
Anyway,
Review it and tell your thoughts about it
>CriticismsAn advice would be helpful!
>What are your thoughts on the plotI want to try my best to make this story interesting and intriguing.
>CharactersAre they interesting, funny, boring, generic, unique, cringe worthy?
>What Ideas YOU have in mind of the story?It's nice that one guy thought of something new, but at the same time it's harder for him to flesh out his original story. But luckily You guys might have something in mind that I haven't thought of!
>Grammars, spelling errors, and imagine the setting of a certain place.The more mistakes people point out to me:
The more the improvements!