>>55528191Nice job! I think I reviewed the first 2 entries already, but not the rest, so I'll share quick thoughts on all 5 of them here.
>Day 3This one had a good flow to it. The clothing was rather flashy, but the theming was cool. Also, Chespin's rant was funny, but the lack of reaction from Smith and Furret was odd. I think there was an opportunity to have them talk about it, which could've led into Chespin admitting he's high-strung without Wooper, tying back into the theme of the story.
>Day 4I reviewed the draft and gave you my thoughts back then, so I won't review it here. I thought it was generally good, though, and I was very happy to see someone write something with Team Buckler.
>Day 5The mutual rant with Toge was funny, and it was neat to see Mindy come back. I liked the way you wrote their chat on the road. However, I thought their handling of the Sunflora incident was odd and made them seem too much like the bad guys, and there's a very abrupt transition from the meadow back to the village. I have very mixed feelings about the ending, too:
I thought Mindy's choice wasn't explained enough, and really could've benefited from making it its own story and going into more detail about it. Most importantly, it would've been better if the POV followed Mindy to show us why she likes the town and how she came to her conclusion, instead of abruptly telling us that she decided to quit the guild.>Day 6A decent comedic entry. Surprised Chespin and Debby get along so well considering she's both a chiller and a winger, lol.
>Day 7Pretty chill, and a satisfying conclusion. I like that it called back to past events and prior chapters of the story. The fight scene was good, and the ending was especially nice... and fittingly cozy.
Overall, this was an enjoyable story. Your writing has definitely gotten better over the last year, and I do hope you keep writing and improving even more. Congratulations on finishing this big story!
