>>33022364I think I have a pole here somewhere... here we go.
>Don't mock her weight, or she'll stab youWHY? I mean, the trivia explained it, but this is such a weird place to be mentioning that. It gave a bad first impression too, with how you word it.
>Egyptian magicPic related.
>Through this magic, she was given [...]W-why do you need magic for that? Is it a magical necklace? Is it a key to an ancient Egyptian tomb? Why?
>Since that day, she has [...]Giving a grand goal like that seems odd outside of PMD. But whatever.
>[...] various quirks she hasElaborate. You can't just say "she has this and that" without going into details. That's lazy writing.
Grammar aside, this is just... strange? Can't say I hate it, but it gives that "you can't be serious" feeling.
