>>30987053OR of this story again. i'll be holding back on my usual feedback until the conclusion is released, but I'll say that the story is doing good so far. Good balance of the bit in the action scene and the drama that caused it, but I think the trigger (line 163-165) could have some more impact if Coba tried to talk to the angry 23.
I'll wait until the last chapter before giving my overall feedback. Keep it up!