>>58645703Great job with the descriptions. It's easy to visualize each location and feel the comfy vibes. I think the lesson about coziness is good, and the fight scene is written well.
The overall plot is maybe a little boring since there's no central conflict (aside from the fight at the end, which feels kinda tacked on despite having a logical reason to exist). Also, there are times when Chespin is worried about traps while Wooper is less cautious, and other times where the roles are reversed, making the characters feel inconsistent. I also wish they brought up Toge again at the end, considering your team and Toge have such a close connection.
I remember you were concerned about your story being too short, but I think the length is fine, and it feels complete.Overall, not a bad story. Thanks for contributing to the event.
