Thank you for all the feedback everyone, I'm glad it seems to have gone over pretty well, I was worried about this one.
>>58696898I think when I do my big revision of the whole thing I definitely want to give him more memory issues in parts 2 and 3. You're right that giving him some reverse memory issues in this part would have helped too. As for how this fits into his overall arc, you'll have to wait and see.
>>58696946I was proud of the nonverbal approach, but I think it's reached its limit. The cats' thoughts are getting too complex to keep it up. And, like you said, it's a good place to make a change while Ben's brain has been replaced with a can of tuna. Mostly I was worried the execution was gonna turn out corny.
>>58697143>I thought you couldn't drive on your meds?>Oh don't worry, I skipped themPoor Kurt has learned nothing. I like the chemistry between Emma and Larson too.
>>58697445Yeah, I can sell that harder. I need to take a page from Snivyanon's book and get better at writing expository paragraphs. I always psych myself out and convince myself it's boring.
>>58698071This is very sweet. Looking forward to learning more about the spoiler here
>>58698523>>58697513I'm glad you like the cats, I was worried they turned out a little bit one-note. Fun fact: Ben's best friend among the cats was originally supposed to be Florence, since they have similar temperaments, but writing the toy box chapter convinced me to give her role to Patti .
