>>58207953Thanks for the response.
>text analyser to check for word frequencyThat's smart, but keep an eye out for phrase frequency too. Lliam says they'll "fit right in" twice in a row, for example. And there are types of repetition that your tool won't catch, like redundant phrasing (i.e., saying "the surface of the ground" instead of just "ground").
>semicolonsAdmittedly, they can be tricky, and other punctuation usually works just fine, so I tend to avoid them myself. But for one thing, I know that semicolons can only be used between independent clauses, and there were some times where you didn't do that.
>Despite her frame being more suited for the aquatic shoreline of the continent she now inhabited, at best; she would happily pounce forward on the ground as if she’d been dirt-bound her entire life.>But this one appeared to move much more actively; mirroring those she’d seen move in this manner like quadrupeds.>Multiple teams were heading off in that direction; a large white cat-ferret [followed by a list of Pokemon]The first two examples should use commas, and the third a colon.
For the record, you used it properly here, and in various other spots, which is good:
>Beda picked herself up on shaky feet, luckily still a biped despite having turned into a bear; maybe this was the world taking mercy on her.Another thing is that the ideas on either side of the semicolon should be closely related to each other, so keep that in mind when choosing whether to use a semicolon or other punctuation.
>i didn't want to point towards their 'major' ideals this early onThat's fair. I am a fan of comfy slide-of-life stuff, and it's fine if you want to take things slow. But it's important for characters to have something solid to work toward so their overarching journey doesn't feel boring and aimless. Still, it sounds like you already have plans for their progression, so that's good. I'm curious to see where it goes (and to learn more about Parora).
