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>>17072047 FanFiction General
>Post your favorite Pokemon fan fictions >Ask for opinions on your fics >Share what you're working on and post updates to your work >And etcetera IRC:
>irc.rizon.net #vpwritethread Catalog:
>https://docs.google.com/document/d/1saTgrG8d0KhCsVwne47w-kYbfGoL9e7wsnrEEzoqqY8/ FAQ:
Can we post NSFW fics?:
>Yes. NSFW pics?:
>No. How do I get a story in the catalog?
>Post in here with the name of the author (If linking from a non-anonymous source), the name of the fic, the genre, and a short summary, and then ask for it to be put in the catalog. If we miss your request, just post again or ask in the irc. Preferably, post in this format to make it easier on us to identify what needs to be added (this will speed up the process of getting your work into the catalog as well): >Title, Author >Link >Genre >Description When posting fics in the thread, please post them as links instead of dumping them.
It’s recommended you post links with spoiler tags to keep the janitors from deleting your stuff.
Anonymous
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>mfw people like me http://pastebin.com/gcHqqBbn Roxie 2, so far.
Anonymous
>>17163430 >mfw people like me Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>>17163484 Yes, I do indeed treat myself like a special snowflake, if I didn't I'd blow my fucking brains out.
Anonymous
Anonymous
Anonymous
>>17163517 Why?
Whta's so bad about being you that you need to be unique to be happy?
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>>17163915 I didn't say I had to be "unique," I just said I liked it that people liked my stories and some Anon got under my skin because my depression medicine fucked up after events from yesterday so now I'm bitchy waaaah poor me wambulance.
Are we tumblr now? I get enough shit there as it is.
Anonymous
>>17163977 Okay
treating yourself like a decent person who deserves to be happy isn't really the same as treating yourself as a special snowflake
Good luck with your depression and I hope you feel better, G.
admitting you have a tumblr is probably bad Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>>17164011 Because I like to network and met some very good friends there.
Besides meeting them, which I'm very glad I did, I regret going to the damn site to begin with. Anonymous
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
Anonymous
>>17164034 Ah, kay. I thought you were trans or something. Anonymous
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>>17164055 Stop replying and leave it as it is
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>>17164058 Trans? What the fuck?
All tumblr has done besides give me new friends is make me hate whatever the fuck "cis" is and hate Homestuck with a burning passion. Anonymous
>>17164086 >hating Cis >not knowing trans I'm not sure you've comprehended the terms here.
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>>17164105 I know what "Trans" is, I said "What the fuck?" as in "Why would you imply that?"
Also, again, I don't know what "cis" means, but a few people there are self-proclaimed "cis" people so I'm already unsure I like whatever that is.
Anonymous
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>>17164125 Cis just means not trans Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
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>>17164125 Okay, found out what "cis" is.
Not against those kinds of people. Just a few people in particular.
Anonymous
>>17164125 cis is pretty much normal people
say, the straight hetero male
Anonymous
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>>17164125 Not gonna lie, I had to look it up on urban dictionary.
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>>17164146 Okay, I'm fucking confused. Why would one proclaim themselves "cismale/cisfemale" if it's a matter of sexual preference? For attention?
Anonymous
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>>17164180 It's not sexual preference, really
it's just like the prefix hetero. Same latin root as trans, basically. Only useful as a term if you really need to state that you were born as whatever you are now. Pokemon topics, everybody!
Anonymous
>>17164180 nobody proclaims themeselves cis
it's just trans that call people like that
Anonymous
ITT: How do your fictions deal with PP points? Specifically do they run out of moves?
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>>17164206 >Nobody proclaims themselves cis You haven't seen this person's tumblr.
Done replying. Anonymous
>>17164208 Flavoring it under stamina or pokemon wearing out really makes the most sense.
You could even have a specific move run out of juice if you needed it for plot, although I think that'd be more like a pokemon being too tired to use hyper beam, but still capable of a normal physical move or something.
Anonymous
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>>17164208 I basically ignore them in favor of making them get tired.
Anonymous
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>>17164226 They probably involve themselves in trans discussions a lot for some reason and want to be clear. Anonymous
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>>17164237 I like that idea. Usually in my battles, they do not last that long. But the one I'm writing now is fucking looooong so I want to be realistic
Anonymous
>>17164237 And I don't want to write "so-and-so ran out of moves...so and so used struggle"
Anonymous
>>17164310 Well yeah that's boring.
But "so and so was too worn out to do anything but flail at the opponent wildly" kind of makes sense?
Anonymous
>>17164326 Yeah. What do you think the trainer's response would be?
Especially if it is a bad guy[/spoiler:lit] Anonymous
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>>17164384 whoops spoiler fail my bad
Anonymous
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bump for "discussion" ha ha
Butler !!vQF061dDoa/
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>>17164208 I actually tackled this in one chapter. The Pokemon simply became unable to perform the move anymore, similar to
>>17164237 's suggestion.
Anonymous
I don't suppose anyone could recommend me a lengthy romance fic?
Anonymous
>>17165585 What do you consider lengthy?
Anonymous
>>17165630 well, by fanfiction standards, 20k+ is fine. I mean, longer is good, but, y'know.
Anonymous
>>17165668 In that case I have this, if you're into yuri. It's just under 30k.
>http://archiveofourown.org/works/999037/chapters/1977887 Anonymous
>>17165668 I would recommend one of my works... But it's horribly unedited...
Plus if you're not into yuri shipping it wouldn't be your cup of tea. Anonymous
Okay guys, I need your help. I felt like I was stepping down pretty low asking you guys for help but after looking through the thread you all seem pretty talented/cool enough, so yo hi.
Clouded Dawn !!RIyKvtVAc9i
>>17165846 Well I'm not too much help when it comes to exercises since most of my writing comes to me naturally from years of doing it in school...
Which of course helped a lot because if gave me practice and great advice from some really good teachers. but I can give some tips and pointers.
From what I see in narrative literature being descriptive is a big tool, for example when you introduce a new area like a town or a natural wonder you should give great detail so the reader will see in there mind what it's meant to look like. And of course since it's a pokemon fic, add in little pokemon interacting with the world.
Honestly beyond that, writing is one of those things that takes practice to get better at, like playing the guitar. Take a critics advice when they point some flaw out in your writing and fix it when you continue writing later on.
Anonymous
>>17166118 hmm well alright
Let's see then, uh maybe someone can give me some tiny ideas to write in a few paragraphs to get myself warmed up and I'll try going from there? Anyone have any requests for me?
(no smut please, I'd love to but that's not gonna be my focus at the moment) Vulpsis
All these spoilers! Well here's the first part of what I intend to upload on my FF page during October (Way off I know but sometimes you just want to write the future parts first rather then write in chronological order)
http://pastebin.com/7ChHEYE1 <This one is about the desert ruins in Unova. It's the Yamask suggestion (this is sfw and about a couple seeking shelter in the ruins from a nasty sandstorm). I was hoping you all would critique it and make suggestions to give the ending a better impact or just make the story better overall
Anonymous
Anonymous
>>17166160 Roxie finds her old skateboard and decides to see if she still has skills
she doesn't Anonymous
Anonymous
>>17166865 It's not bad actually. I mean I'm not exactly good at critiquing stuff, so like I can't really give you anything in depth about what I liked or not and stuff.
The only thing I can really say is how you had Billy Jo use rocker and boarder kind of made me cringe, since (at least for me) those tend to be the kind of words you would expect to hear from somehow who was just trying to come off as "hip" or whatever. That's the absolute opposite of a major issue though.
Anonymous
>>17167063 I haven't actually played BW2 so the only interaction I got from them is reading Roxie's bulbapedia article. I know pretty much everyone except the characters from BW2. :I
Anonymous
>>17167145 Addendum: I am also the whitest, least-radical person I know, so there's that. No idea in hell how to make people actually sound cool whoops.
Anonymous
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>>17167190 I probably would have written it like "No way! I mean I get that you're a musician now, but there's no way you used to be a skater too, especially as a kid."
Although I think I might've gone with "used to skate" instead there also.
Anonymous
>>17165700 Thanks! I have no idea who Roxie is, since I never played B2/W2, but I'm sure it'll be good none-the-less!
>>17165783 Please, share! I'm good with anything, as long as it's romantic, and not written horribly.
Anonymous
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>>17167682 >no idea who Roxie is That is to say, I've seen pictures, and heard of her, but, again, never played BW2.
Only Pokemon I haven't played and of course there's a bunch of content for a character that only appears in it.
Anonymous
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>>17166168 I liked it, even though I didn't find it creepy or something. Actually found it more sad.
Anonymous
Anonymous
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>>17170804 >>17170833 Do someone have more like these?
Anonymous
there was once a boy named Namefag. He loved Pokémon, but he also loved books. one day Namefag found an interesting book named after a time of day, and got so into it he didn't leave his room for weeks.
Anonymous
>>17173078 Needs more
smut before I can take you seriously.
Sylveon
>>17174308 how making him love the book emotionally?
Anonymous
Anonymous
Anonymous
Anonymous
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>>17175309 That would be a start. Also, you never mention the book's title. L2reader-immersion
Anonymous
Is there a way to seem modest when posting things without looking like I'm fishing for praise, or looking like I'm trying to get people to feel sorry for me?
Vulpsis
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>>17177623 Just post the link to your story and give us a little summarization so we can critique it
Anonymous
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>>17177623 Who are you implying?
Anonymous
Dunno if anyone remembers me, anon from last night who wrote a few paragraphs about Roxie trying to skate. Continuing that now; ficlet requests welcome, gonna honedge my writing skills off of ficlet requests. No smut please.
Anonymous
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>>17177623 Just say something like:
Hey, I just wrote this adventure story about a trainer running into trouble in the Giant Chasm.
Here's a link if you want to check it out:
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9559873/1/Shadow-in-the-Rocks This is a thread for writing, it's not odd to post a fic or ask for feedback.
Anonymous
>>17180063 Quickies about a shiny honedge failing to temp people into
touching its sash to drain energy Anonymous
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>>17180198 I tried but it's really awkward and weird, and I don't mean in the way of the writing.
"TOUCH MY SASH, TOUCH IT, NOTHING BAD WILL HAPPEN I SWEAR" Anonymous
>Tfw nobody tells you how good or bad your story is.
Anonymous
>>17181413 That is truly the biggest insult you can give to a writer.
Anonymous
>>17181562 I've heard worse.
Anonymous
Anonymous
>>17181624 Like being part of a forum's fanfic mocking party.
Anonymous
>>17181697 Is that really a thing?
I kind of want to see that. Anonymous
>>17181736 Yup, they take various fanfics, mostly fapfics, call the authors pedophiles if they write about certain series (Pokemon, Teen Titans, Harry Potter, etc) and spend thread after thread mocking them.
Anonymous
>>17181825 Sounds pretty shitty bro, but at least you know what they think of your work. Even if it is unfair judgement.
Anonymous
>>17181866 They think I should stop writing and kill myself.
That's not really constructive criticism.
Anonymous
>>17181915 Better than nothing at all.
But are you really going to stop writing? Any sane person would know not to listen, and give in to their elitist ways.
Anonymous
>>17180198 Any requests that aren't about rapist swords?
Anonymous
>>17182134 Even if I lke a Lewd Fic about Honedge family, request a story about a Male Lopunny wanting to laid with a gorgeous Gardevoir, and when he is about to succeed, he noticed "her" tong and try to run out but, you know where this is going on. Please?
Anonymous
>>17181966 No. Told them I wouldn't and they got pissed.
>I can't just stop writing. >OMG YES YOU CAN, JUST STOP Anonymous
>people trying to run off the only good writefag these threads have had in 3 years
Anonymous
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>>17182688 Who are you talking about?
>Captcha: WRITING piesPar Anonymous
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>>17182574 Well good for you. You stood up for yourself, and basically told them to fuck off.
Great Job 10/10
Sure, being mocked feels bad, but you were mocked for writing something you wanted to write about. They're mocking was based on opinion. Which is nothing to feel bad about.
Anonymous
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>>17182417 Ooh, this sounds exciting. It's nice to see/read about pretty Gardevoir boys fucking things for a change of pace.
Anonymous
>>17182574 stay strong anon, those fagets a shit and your writing is awesome
>>17182417 i know i said no smut and i'm not into m/m in the first place, so sorry I didn't take it further but let's get racy anyway i gave it a shot employ whatever headcanons you want to justify the pokemon speaking English but whatever here you go
http://pastebin.com/DptvN0bv Anonymous
>>17183100 >"Oh, and call me Sirknight..." Groooan.
Anonymous
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>>17183163 i have no idea how to end things, i should probably work on that Anonymous
Anonymous
>>17184366 >Tfw nobody tells you if you're doing a good job or not Anonymous
>>17184544 Then post a link to the motherfucking story if all you're gonna do is bitch about how nobody's giving you feedback.
Anonymous
>>17184726 On the same subject
>Read a fic you really like >Get to the end >It's not a conclusion >Look at the final Author's notes >"yeaahh so this wasn't getting as many reviews as my Take and the Power of JuJu story, so I'm just going to put all my time into that instead" Just because I don't review doesn't mean I'm not reading.
Anonymous
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>>17185219 That's one of the things I like of AO3 over
ff.net , as simple as it is. You can leave kudos that's basically like liking the fic, so you can show the author you like it without having to write a review if you don't want
Anonymous
>>17185219 Well what else what he was going to go on? Surely nobody's gonna keep writing if nobody is reading.
Anonymous
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>>17185618 Well, in this case, it wasn't true. But he didn't really know if nobody was reading, TBH.
Anonymous
>>17185618 I wouldI write for myself before I write for anyone who would read what I'm writing not to come off as douchey or anything Anonymous
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>>17184726 It's not on this computer, but I already took it down.
Anonymous
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>>17185980 Nothing really wrong with that, but it's just that you wouldn't make a story available to the public eye unless you wanted someone to read it. Even if that someone is just 1-3 people.
Anonymous
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Might I be able to get another non-lewd ficlet request? That sorta ended horribly when I tried it, so I was willing to give it a shot but I'd prefer to stay out of that for the time being.
Anonymous
>>17185219 >Just because I don't review doesn't mean I'm not reading. You should have reviewed nigga.
Anonymous
>>17186791 And what if I read the story after the author already decided that no one cares?
Anonymous
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>>17186971 Do it anyway since no one else did it?
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
Anonymous
Ok guys, favorite fics ever, go!>inb4 Pedestal
Rooh
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There's been a lot of anons talking recently about how they are afraid to write or post their work because they feel like maybe their work is poorly written or that if they did write, that it would be unreadable. If you feel this way, know that there are people who can help you with proofreading if you ask in here or the irc.
Anonymous
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>>17190453 Brettygud/10
I'm not fond of the excuse plot but that's not really anything relevant beyond personal preference
Rooh
There have been a lot of anons talking recently about how they are afraid to write or post their work because they feel like maybe their work is poorly written or that if they did write, that it would be unreadable. If you feel this way, know that there are people who can help you with this if you ask in here or the irc.
Anonymous
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Here's one for all you Glorious, sexual people , what's a good fic that isn't entirely just fluffy romance or lewd? If it's in there, fine, but I prefer that to be a smaller part of a larger story
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
A bump for the sake of bumping.
http://pastebin.com/cP9Nj6pr 2 Female Ninetales x Male Team Rocket Grunt Anonymous
Anonymous
>>17190638 Is Derrick in the same egg group???
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>>17190716 I would hope not.
Humans don't impregnate Pokemon in my stories. Anonymous
>>17190698 I was under the impression everyone had read that. FFS I first learned of it from you goobers.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/4871317/1/Pedestal Anonymous
>>17190738 As far as you know Anonymous
>>17190800 Foreshadowing, maybe?
Anonymous
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>>17191294 I have no idea what you mean *wink*
Anonymous
>>17190749 It looks generic and long.
Anonymous
>>17191583 Long? yes
Generic? hardly
I thought the same thing at first but things start happening... very intricate and odd things indeed
Anonymous
>>17186791 Is it bad that I wanna read a fic with a female Machoke and a male gardevoir, after seeing that pic?
Anonymous
Anonymous
>>17193511 Why not brainstorm a plot and see if anyone picks it up?
Anonymous
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>>17196941 I can't think up a decent plot to save my life
Anonymous
>>17190738 Oi what happened to your serena story
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
Anonymous
>>17201326 What does that mean?
You working on it still?
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>>17201409 Yeah, whenever I have time to I will, I just have 4 other stories in progress too.
Anonymous
>>17202529 Thats cool keep it up.
Clouded Dawn !!RIyKvtVAc9i
Anonymous
>>17203029 Did you read it?
Clouded Dawn !!RIyKvtVAc9i
>>17203889 Actually I meant quote an take it off the Quick reply but you see that didn't work out.
Anonymous
>>17203921 No, not that.
The other thing.
Clouded Dawn !!RIyKvtVAc9i
>>17203931 Which other thing?
Anonymous
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>>17204002 Oh fuggadehbout it.
Anonymous
Anonymous
Anon that asked about battle scenes a couple of days back.
Anonymous
>>17206451 >Absolutely no smut Die.
In.
A.
Hole.
Faggot.
And.
Stop.
Writing.
Anonymous
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>>17206451 That looks fine.
>>17206637 >If it doesn't have smut then it's terrible This is seriously what people in this thread believe.
Anonymous
>>17206451 If you want a little feedback, careful with repetition, you say "alright" too much, and sometimes you use attack names too frequently (quick-attack).
You also generally use past tense, but slip into present on occasion. "say" is present, so is "collides".
I'd also caution against tagless dialogue until you have a better handle on things. It can cause confusion. And while it's fairly obvious who's talking in this small scene, in others, it might not be. I'd also recommend it since this is a little sparse on the description side as well, and throwing some in during a fight would make this much stronger.
Butler !!vQF061dDoa/
>>17190749 I still need to read this. I keep falling off.
Survival Project is one of my favorites, it's in the OP's catalogue.
Anonymous
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>>17207677 Thank you for the advice. It's actually just my second time writing fanfiction. The first time, I got some pretty positive feedback, so I decided to try it a second time.
Anonymous
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>>17206451 We use pastebin here, sailor.
Anonymous
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>>17191617 When I first went on the thread, I thought Pedestal would be a big topic of discussion.
That's easily one of the most famous/well-written pokemon fanfics out there. I strongely recommend it.
Vulpsis
Well I know people complain about fur on fur smut but the new chapter for my Castelia's Daycare Services is out.
In case you didn't know this series is themed around a dungeon style hell hole where a Sneasel has fun with Pokemon that the daycare uses for breeding purposes/profit. This new chapter is about the daycare trying to test out an elixer to see if they can fertilize incompatible Pokemon which involves a Riolu. Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/9002471/4/Castelia-s-Daycare-Services Anonymous
been gone for a week. did the story about bullied May get posted yet?
Anonymous
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>>17211406 No it haven't been yet
Anonymous
Oh god, I wrote these when I was like 16.
Anonymous
>>17213977 Wrote what nigga?
Anonymous
Anonymous
I would like to get some reviews on this story I'm writing. I've only written the first chapter, and I haven't had any motivation to write another. Maybe this will help. The story is about Lysandre's past and what made him into what he is today. I kind of wanted to keep the identity of his brother a secret, but it's probably obvious who he is. Also I am horrible at knowing when to make a new paragraph, so help there would be appreciated.
http://pastebin.com/9Lx8z62h Anonymous
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>>17210725 The series is a bit too dark for my tastes, so I skimmed more than I read. But it seems you've got a nice plot going on.
Anonymous
Rooh
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>>17214648 I am. I'm watching you.
Anonymous
>>17214356 Well other than that Lysandre wasn't alive at that time the Weapon was built, I enjoyed it.
I liked how you described the chars and Lysandres thoughts
Anonymous
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>>17214698 The reason Lysandre is there will be explained in future chapters.
Delys
>>17214356 If I can be totally honest, it felt- really, really rushed.
I know that you're trying to make the brother thing a bit of a mystery, but I just- I'm not getting that at all. I'm making guesses, sure, but- I don't know, I feel more frustrated trying to follow who's talking and what exactly is going on more than anything else.
Additionally, I'd look at your grammar a bit more.
Ex.
>"into his hand" should just be "in his hand" >"one of his favorite Pokemon's" should really just be "one of his favorite Pokemon" All in all, you're not terrible or anything, I just- don't know what you're trying to get at, and I'm sorry if that seems to be overly harsh.
There are really good descriptions here, but some of the thoughts expressed are so choppy that it throws off the flow of your writing. You go from these really nice words to just outright stating what's going through someone's head.
Like, here :
> "His brother was clearly suffering from the grief of his pokemon’s death. Lysandre was questioning his brother’s ability to rule the kingdom. He had questioned it long before, but now he knew." I don't like this because it just comes across as startlingly blunt compared to some of the writing you'd done earlier in the story. I mean, I know why the characters feel this way, but it's sort of like- bland, the way you have it here. It needs to be less- "Character A does B. Character C feels D."
if you know what I mean.
AND, if they're brothers (which is- not really possible, canonically, but I'm not going to get on you for that) you really shouldn't use "the brother" to describe one of them, because that could technically be either?
I do hope you can make something of this, but in the meantime, giving it a once-over wouldn't hurt. You're not a bad writer, but some spaces do need your attention.
Delys
>>17214827 Oh my Arceus, that was longer than I expected it to be.
Sorry for the huge post. In my defense, I review things pretty often, and I can't do one-sentence reviews. Those don't help anyone.
Anonymous
>>17214356 Grammatically it could be cleaned up a bit, a few missing commas, "pedals" instead of "petals" and the like. The thing that really bothered me though was the paragraphing. I don't know if pastebin did some reformatting, but you need more paragraphs.
The way it's written, “So this is what you have been spending countless days on instead of your royal duties.” is tagged as Lysander and his brother. Also, throughout the paragraph, you switch between Lysander and his brother. In general, paragraphs should be tied to a character. I won't harp on this in case it's just pastebin's fault, but otherwise, I'd definitely work on that.
Other than that, keep at it. Things will smooth out with practice, and you picked an interesting plot.
Anonymous
>>17214827 >>17214844 Don't worry. I asked for a review and I got it. Although, I don't quit understand your first paragraph. What are you not getting, who the brother is supposed to be, or how it is supposed to be a secret? As for who's talking, if I had just wrote someone's thoughts or actions, then they are the one speaking next sentence, and if there are two quotes right next to each other then that means there is a switch in whose talking. I know it's weird, but I hate it when someone speaks it ends with "he said" every time. That's why I try to leave it out and find other words for said.
The reason the last few sentences are like that is because the main character is Lysandre and I want it to be close to a 1st person story. I guess I could have put "he thought to himself" in there.
You probably knew this, but every time brother is used it is reffering to Lysandre's brother.
Anonymous
>>17214848 It wasn't Pastebin's fault. As I said in my post I don't really know when to make a new paragraph. I've see it done where each time a new character talks it is a new paragraph, but I don't like it because when two characters are talking back and forth without any action happening then there seem to be a paragraph every line. Also I don't think it works well when a character says something and is then cut off, because I want the following line to be right after the one cut off like in a real conversation. I know that even though I don't like to do it that way, I probably should, but I've read fanfics that were writen this way and I could follow them fine.
Delys
>>17215113 How it's supposed to be a secret, and WHY it's a secret, mostly. It feels- gimmicky. If you're going to go for the mysterious thing, I'd suggest finding a better way to implement it. I feel like the solution is being practically shoved in my face, and then- what? He's not even explicitly named at the end of the story, which makes it seem that the reader just has to deal with the story beating around the bush, as it were.
You don't have to end every sentence with "he said", but it's always better to name the speakers somehow, especially if it's somewhat ambiguous.
I still don't think "brother" is a good choice- at the very least, don't use "the brother" to refer to AZ. Use "his brother" or "Lysandre's brother" or even come up with something else to call him.
And formatting- as much as it may trouble you, you really should have a new paragraph every time a person starts to speak. You may be able to follow it that way, but to me, it looks a bit squished. People move and act while they talk as well, so if the emptiness of this format bothers you, you can always try buffing those lines with actions, thoughts, and feelings.
Delys
>>17215250 I meant 'chapter', not 'story' in that first paragraph.
It's 4AM. I can make some mistakes.
Anonymous
>>17215184 Don't be afraid of whitespace. As it is, what you posted is visually intimidating, large blocks of text, and boring - every paragraph looks the same, just four big same-size chunks of text. Reading is a visual medium after all.
As for paragraphs, whenever the focus switches, new paragraph. If a paragraph is about Lysander, and Lysander is talking, that's fine, but as soon as the focus becomes someone else, or someone else speaks, new paragraph.
If you need someone to be cut-
Dash and have the other person start talking in the new paragraph. If you want it to be very smooth, tag the first piece before, and the second speaker after
Lysander stormed in. "What the hell-"
"Not now, Lysander. I'm doing stuff." Bob continued to do stuff furiously.
But two people should never speak in the same paragraph. You're writing, so you obviously can easily follow who is who, other can't, and they won't bother reading it if they have to play detective to figure out who's talking.
Delys
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>>17215325 >Lysander stormed in. "What the hell-" >"Not now, Lysander. I'm doing stuff." Bob continued to do stuff furiously. Pfffhaha. I'm picturing Bob as like, one of the original Team Flare scientists that got booted because he wouldn't quit aggressively doing stuff.
Not even Team Flare stuff. Just stuff.
Anonymous
>>17215250 As I said in my original post, I know the secret is easy to guess. I could probably remove some details, but I don't think I could remove enough without there not being enough information to know what's going on. The reason it is a secret is because you're not supposed to know exactly what time period it is taking place in until later. Of course I want to have clues so people can guess and have a feeling of satisfaction when they see that they're right. If I outright stated that his brother was AZ then everyone would ask the same questions about how it's possible or why. Also he is not named at the end because this isn't the end of the story. This is just the first chapter. the story goes all the way up to Lysandre's confrontation with the player.
I appreciate your feedback, but so far you have only talked about grammar and formatting. How about the story? Is it interesting enough to read another chapter?
Anonymous
>>17215270 Well I already made my response talking about that. Even so, AZ is not named at the end of the chapter because I'm saving that for another chapter.
Anonymous
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>>17208190 >>17191583 >>17190698 Most of the early stuff is filler, 90% of chars are introduced in the last quarter, and 80% of them die.
There are translation devices that let you talk to the fucking Pokemon.
ARCEUS WAS SECRETLY BEHIND EVERYTHING TO TEST THE PROTAGONIST
And yes I read the whole goddamn thing fuck all
Anonymous
>>17193511 Is super lewd okay?
Delys
>>17215411 I apologize. I'm an English major. Formatting is my language, and it's usually the first thing to pop out at me.
As for the story, I'm not sure how much sense it makes. I really do understand what you're trying to do here, but even though you're trying to create an aura of mystery, it still has to make some sense.
And you really should consider planting the reveal at the end of the chapter, that way it's like "whoa, what?" and easier to catch onto and nibble on. People would want more because they'd be satisfied more immediately, AND they'd want to know how this would happen, which would make them stick around.
Keeping an obvious secret a secret for too long just seems- counter-productive.
As for whether I'd read more of it? Maybe. Most likely not.
I've read a lot of fiction- a lot of really surreal, bizarre fiction in my lifetime, but I don't enjoy being confused for no particular reason.
>>17215494 ah, so.
Anonymous
Anonymous
>>17215555 I feel that not telling who Lysandre's brother is can hook people both ways. If you don't know that it's AZ then the reader might want to read more to find out who he is. If they do figure out it's AZ then the reader might want to figure out how it is possible.
If you knew what happens next then you would realize that it isn't as surreal as it seems (at least by pokemon standards). I'll tell you what happens and hopefully you'll see what I'm going for.
Lysandre tells several high ranking officials in the kingdom about AZ's activities. They all agree that he is not in the right state of mind and decide to overthrow him.
They go to Geosenge Town where AZ is and confront him. By this time the machine is fully built and AZ is about to use it. It turns out that the soldiers AZ sent to different sides of the region had captured Xerneas and Yveltal (possibly in their hybernating forms). AZ has hooked up Xerneas to the machine and many pokemon.
Lysandre flies to the top of the machine where AZ is to confront him. AZ activates the machine to revive Floete and Lysandre is unable to stop him. Being that close to the machine when it went off gave Lysandre the same immortality as AZ and Floete.
AZ then uses the power of Yveltal which is also hooked up to the machine and fires the blast that decimates the Kalos region.
Disgusted, Floete goes away and AZ chases after her. This leaves Lysandre lead the survivors to rebuild Kalos.
The story continues through the ages and Lysandre learns how beautiful and ugly the world can be.
Delys
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>>17215769 I have one more thought
and then I'm going to go to bed.
You have a good thing going
kinda . I'd just like to see things developed more, I guess, because I got only bites of information out of the first chapter, and that's supposed to be the point in which the story is getting set up, you know?
Just work on it. I'll try to catch you if you're around some other time.
Anonymous
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((I got really bored and decided to poke fun at the Doom fanfiction. If I got any references wrong, I haven't beaten gen V, but I am working on my progress in White 2 right now.))
Anonymous
is it just me or is it easier to write naked than it is with clothes on
Clouded Dawn !!RIyKvtVAc9i
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>>17216599 Maybe the less restrictive you get when you don't have them on?
Anonymous
Anonymous
Florges anon here. Having trouble starting yp the whole sex theme, being the filthy virgin I am. Tried to read other fics to get an idea, but they all seem to start out as a crappy blowjob . Any suggestions on how to start?
Clouded Dawn !!RIyKvtVAc9i
>>17219948 If you like fluffy shit like I do, you'd start off with kissing and such with light petting/touching thing like the breasts first. Then you start playing with the downstairs of her then she goes down on him ect ect. At least that's how I like to do it personally. Anonymous
>>17219948 As Clouded Dawn said, start with kissing and move on to light/heavy petting, then move on to more "Exotic" acts
Anonymous
>>17219948 Skin is pretty much a sex-organ when lightly touched caressing various spots like the hips, thighs, and sides are a good warmup. Be a bit tortuous in the warmup (I mean, take a long time) to give the main event more punch. I was never into blowjobs; then again I prefer to take the active role. Clouded Dawn !!RIyKvtVAc9i
>>17220540 This. So much this. Anonymous
Anonymous
Anonymous
Anonymous
Anonymous
Delys
>>17225202 If I throw up some words on Pastebin and call it a fanfic, would that count?
Anonymous
Anonymous
>>17225202 Do you want one that's completed? Cause I have one, but it's not quite done
Anonymous
>>17225358 Don't be a idiot, ya idiot.
>>17225841 Depends on what order the words are in and what the words depict.
>>17226003 I'm not usually interested in those types of stories, but I read it, and it was pretty good.
>>17226524 Uhh. Okay?
Anonymous
I feel like writing a story, but the problem is I can't make a good plot for shit.
Anonymous
>>17226933 So what I'm asking for is a plot.
Delys
>>17226581 Pff. Stifling my creative vision.
But seriously. I'm working on a thing I might boink up here if I'm feeling brave enough.
>>17226933 >>17227088 That was some GET.
Since I don't know what you're into other than Pokemon, how about you write a little drabble about your favorite 'mon and how it feels during it's evolutionary stages? If it evolves, anyway. If it doesn't, you could write about all the Trainers it's had or something.
Probably dumb, but eh. It's better than nothing?
Anonymous
>>17227244 Hmm.
Would a short story about the life of a Pokemon or something work?
Delys
>>17227666 I'd imagine you can interpret it any way you want to.
You probably already know this, but Seventh Sanctum always has some interesting things to get your thoughts going in a certain direction. Plot generators and challenges and the like.
http://www.seventhsanctum.com/generate.php?Genname=writechallenge Anonymous
>>17227791 Same guy here, I just wrote a small little snippet. It's just the prologue though. The main stuff comes in the second, and final chapter.
http://pastebin.com/PsAWQV7b Also bump cause 9th page.
Anonymous
Everybody dead or something?
Delys
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>>17230224 I'm a bit buried right now,
but the end made me have a feeling or two. I'll probably go into a sickening amount of detail later.
>>17231004 Dead inside.
hurr hurr.
Anonymous
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>>17220076 >>17220540 >>17220464 If you saw the preview from a few threads before, I was somewhat leaning on a dom-kinda story, but I could see how it could be started with stuff like that. Thanks.
Anonymous
This is one of the better things on /vp/
Anonymous
>>17232828 too bad everyone is busy sleeping to contribute stories. Doesn't help that good stories on fanfiction were purged recently.
Here's my favorite one so far:
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/6640086/1/Saffron Butler !!vQF061dDoa/
>>17232896 What was purged?
Anonymous
>>17233281 Well, guess I should specify that the good smut stories were purged.
Some include, but aren't limited to
Mtrainer x FGastrodon - some teens bet money that one wouldn't screw a gastrodon, to which he did.
2 pages worth of gardevoir stuff gone.
There was a MTrainer x FMismagius story too, but that got wiped out as well. it was the ONLY lemon story involving a mismagius
There was another MTrainer x FAudino story involving the dream world. The last thing I remember is that the trainer punched out the dream professor.
A few weird ones involving Nidoqueen, ditto, and a few other classic 151 mons.
That's all I remember
Rooh
Anonymous
Hmm...found something on pastebin that holds a good size collection of stories. enjoy.
http://pastebin.com/ZTZhtz6b Anonymous
>find an active place to discuss and share fanfiction >it's Pokemon ONLY
Rooh
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>>17234127 >http://pastebin.com/ZTZhtz6b you found a pastebin version of the original catalog which includes clickable links and whatnot. This is included at the bottom of the current catalog, which u can find a link for in the op
Anonymous
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>>17234303 What happened to that one guy who said he was working on a non-Pokemon story that by itself was longer than Lord of the Rings or something?
Anonymous
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>>17234303 what's stopping you from discussing/sharing?
Anonymous
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>>17234303 You realize a lot of people here are willing to discuss something here even if it's not Pokemon related, right?
Anonymous
>>17233577 >There was a MTrainer x FMismagius story too, but that got wiped out as well. it was the ONLY lemon story involving a mismagius. And it wasn't uploaded anywhere else? I want to read it now that I know it exists.
Clouded Dawn !!RIyKvtVAc9i
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I feel I should post the progress I have done on the adventure fic so far since I'm visiting my mother in Vegas for the next two day and I won't have time to do any writing until after I get back. Plus I just got done with the worst of my illness.
http://pastebin.com/LBRPv68U It's a bit unedited and it's just a clip for now, this is not the full first chapter. I already know what I'll be doing in it as well and it's gonna be good.
Butler !!vQF061dDoa/
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Great progress on my next chapter tonight. Really on a roll.
Anonymous
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>>17233577 Suddenly recalled there being a Mtrainer/FMilotic too, but that's long gone
The Cancer
Need help with a forgotten website. It was mostly (nsfw) Pokemon facfic I believe the banner had a Latias reading. If something could help it would've much appreciated.
Anonymous
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>been asking about these a month before winter holidays >finally get one
Anonymous
>>17241612 I'm not sure, but I think you're thinking og agnph
The Cancer
Anonymous
>>17238328 Its probably gone, but I do remmeber how it went.
Trainer admits he may be attracted to pokemon, doesn't help that he has a full team of female-like (gardevoir, lopunny, mismagius, roserade, etc).
Best line: "In my defense, lopunnny has a great ass, far greater than any Nurse Joy could have."
Often masturbates. Mismagius's ball drops and opens during an "intense" session with one of his faps. He
came all over her face . She then uses those ribbons like hands to continue the session, and then
they have sex. the end,
Anonymous
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>>17242557 I did a Mismagius story with someone else a while back, maybe it's that one you're thinking of.
Anonymous
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>>17241980 Fuck AGNPH. If you're not in their super special "We all met in person" gang they want nothing to do with you.
I'm glad Ardy or whoever he was got banned, guy was a dick.
Anonymous
>>17243236 If you still have a copy of it, would you mind posting it?
Anonymous
>>17243737 That would be AWESOME if you could re-post it, mate.
Also, I remember that the anon that made this story below wanted to do a sequel. Any news on it?
>Serena starts to cry after losing for the 20th time >"A weak trainer with a weak spirit. How fucking fitting." >"W-who are you to decide that?! I've come this far all by myself! That has to count for something!" >"If it really meant anything, you wouldn't be bawling your eyes out like a child that didn't get her way. Face it, you're a fraud. A joke. You didn't even face the Elite Four." >"You're wrong..." >"Didn't anyone ever tell you to respect your superiors? I've only beaten you several times now, and THAT proves I'm better than you'll ever be! Bad girls like you should be punished for your badmouthing." >punch >"AAAAAHHH! No... stop..." >"Oh, what's this? A Mega Ring? That sure came in handy when I crushed your Mega Absol with one hit. It wasn't even super-effective! Not that you'd know anything about type advantages." >"Put it back! Y-you're going too far! Please, STOP!" >"Mega Rings are designed to bring out a Pokemon's true potential! But what good is a potential if Pokemon are stuck with a weak trainer like you? Maybe it'd be better if someone else found it..." >"Please... no, I'll do anything!" >"You CAN'T do anything! You never could!" >Serena jumps for the ring, but she's too late >chucked in a river >"NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!" >"Hahahaha! Cry all you want! It's gone, just with any hope you had of being a decent trainer. Just goes to show how weak you really are, Serena." >"I hate you... I HATE YOU!" >Tears pouring down her face Anonymous
Anonymous
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>>17247447 bumping with a story from og agnph
http://fics.agn.p h/viewstory.php?sid=388&chapter=3
Anonymous
I asked once, and I'll ask again:
Anonymous
>>17251377 Hmm...all the decent romance fics are pretty much humanXhuman.
There might be a few stories in the pastebin worth a try, but i'm not 100% sure.
Try these from the collection:
http://pastebin.com/CDQ7d3WM - Latias X Ash
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5876617/1/Clouded-Heart - Mhuman x FGardevoir drama/thingy
http://pastebin.com/nWUFLT4Z - MHuman x Kangaskhan romance/tragedy fic
Anonymous
>>17247447 But what exactly do you want? Romantic Fic with zero smut or fics with little smut and a lot of romance stuff? Because SFW HumanXPokemon fics are pretty odd, and most of them are frienship or Drama/Terror/That kind of deppressing shit. I can't think in a fic like you want... only this one came to my mind:
http://pastebin.com/xxs4TYXV it have smut, but I think it's pretty cute
Anonymous
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>>17252282 holy shit its quite good
though personally I see scolipedes as male . Would read again.
Anonymous
An anon just made a quick story on where the hell eggs from daycare go. Posting it here before thread 404s.
Anonymous
>>17254091 After scanning the room I set my attention on the frying pan, which was on a high heat, and seemed to be emitting a noise sounding remarkably like a faint scream, somewhat familiar to my Dunsparces scream I heard when entering the room, though it was much quieter. I apprehensively approached the frying pan, and with every step my pokemon grew more frantic, I actually feared for my Dunsparces life, though I was far too interested in the frying pan to care enough for it, after all I could always breed another, it doesn't even have the right nature. I got pretty close to it, but I couldn't make out what was inside due to the rooms lighting, it didn't help that the light was flickering too. That's when it hit me, the butter used in the frying pan was spitting, and it scalded my fucking nose causing me to yell. The couple were alerted by this and came running back, shouting reveal yourself. I didn't care anymore, I got that far, found an egg which I was certain to be Dunsparces, and a frying pan. I leaped towards the frying pan, ready for anything, or so I thought.
Dunsparce was hideously disfigured, after all the egg mustn't have been anywhere near close to hatching, it was literally conceived earlier on in the morning. Dunsparce consisted of a liquefied jelly-like substance, which was hardening every second due to the heat. I noticed the sound I heard before was much clearer now, it wasn't all in my head as I had hoped. The dunsparce was faintly screaming k-kill me.
At this point the couple stormed in, faces as pale as a corpse, struck in fear of what I had came to learn, their darkest secret. I'm not sure how long we stood there, staring at each other, light flickering, Dunsparce screaming and the smell no one would ever forget, but it felt like a life time. Finally the couple were the first to break. It's not what it looks like they said, please don't tell anyone they said. I wasn't listening to any of it.
Anonymous
>>17254120 I thought to myself I'm probably as bad as them, I have bred pokemon thousands of times in hopes of getting a retarded one, purely because it's a different colour to the rest. I have also bred thousands to get maximum stat pokemon, which involved a lot of incestuous activities, the ones with <6IV were released at level 1 into level 50+ areas due to convenience, they probably died.
I had a flashback to when Proffessor Oak handed me his pokedex and said finish my dream. I remember thinking what he would think of me now, and how I'm not fit to be called a pokemon trainer after all I've done.
I snapped out of it, furious I had such thoughts. I remembered they nearly killed Snorlax from a rare candy overdose, he was knocked out on the bridge for weeks, and they did that for fun. Consumed by rage I quickly reached for my Humaballs, prototypes created by a retired drunk, who used to be one of the best pokeball engineers known to man. These balls are capable of capturing humans souls, and placing them in a random pokemon. They also have the properties of the masterball, meaning they always catch the target, no matter what.
Without realizing, not to my own stupidity, I reached for my voltorb, which has the exact appearance of the Humaball. Alerted and disgusted by my sweaty hands it exploded. The couple were killed, not by the voltorb but by pokemon which were freed by the explosion. I will never forget what a red Pikachu looks like, it was completely covered in the couples blood, with nothing to say other than Pika pika. I obviously died, the voltorb was in my hand, there was no way I would survive. Though I don't mind too much, out of all the harm I did in the world, I did grant one wish. Dunsparce got what he wanted.
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>>17243737 >>17243987 http://pastebin.com/FM3e86fj I think this is it.
If not, oh well, because I'm not contacting him to ask if he has it. Anonymous
Anonymous
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
I'm having a few problems and I want your guys' opinions since you're my primary audience these days.
Anonymous
>>17255187 Try not writing smut.
Anonymous
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>>17251615 Totally appreciate it, but damn are they short.
There has to be at least one out there. It's ridiculous I can't find one.
Anonymous
Several years ago I found a lewd fanfic on some weird website that had the 7 eeveelutions and an Eevee (All female). I don't remember much of the plot but it did involve 8 guys as well (Basically Human x Eeveelutions). I think one of them was named Chazz. Does anybody have a remote idea as to what fanfiction I am talking about? I have spent a while trying to find it again with no success.
Anonymous
>>17256571 No, the only thing that comes even close to that was one with one guy having a harem with all the eeveelutions.
Anonymous
>>17256627 Alright, thanks anyway. I can't even find the website it was on. I do know it was based off of a picture but it could be classified as nsfw.
Anonymous
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>>17256702 Well I found the same picture on a foolz /vp/ thread and it wasn't deleted, so Ill just post it here and give it a spoiler tag. its not that bad. Does this ring any bells for somebody?
https://0-media-cdn.foolz.us/ffuuka/board/vp/image/1385/26/1385264595360.jpg Anonymous
>>17233577 >Mtrainer x FGastrodon >MTrainer x FMismagius >Mtrainer/FMilotic >all purged Why can't we have nice things. No no, it's fine, I'll just go enjoy one of the thousand Lucario or other overused pokemon fanfics.
Anonymous
>>17255187 My only advice is to go back to your roots, what made you start to write, etc etc. Maybe study other stories that accomplised those goals you weren't able to.
>>17258079 Not enough peeps to make new versions :L
Also, someone make new thread. I think we're about to hit bump limit
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
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>>17258609 >go back to your roots .. Hi Hi Puffy AmiYumi?
I wrote the first ever erofic of that show, so I guess that'd be my roots?
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>>17255878 Tried that. Didn't work out so well. Came off as boring.
Anonymous
>>17258698 So, what're you asking?
Tips?
Suggestions on what to write?
What?
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>>17258876 All of the above, I guess.
Anonymous
>>17258945 Write. Write. Write. Read good writing, or at least writing you like, and compare things they do to your own writing. Try and figure out what works for you.
Well what genre do you like to write? Usually I would assume Smut and/or Romance, but it's my new years resolution not to assume shit, so I'll wait for you to answer first.
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>>17259221 You hit the nail on the head. Romance/Smut.
I'm just going through some emo Internet drama shit so my inspiration to do anything is off.
Anonymous
>>17259281 Well, what sort of pairings do you like then?
Human-human? Pokemon-human? and if so, who?
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
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>>17259329 Both, and it's pretty much flavor-of-the-month in terms of who.
Anonymous
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>>17255187 I honestly think you're worrying about nothing.
But anywho, You could try experimenting with how you write.
Try making fics with more feels and maybe more indepth how the protagonist feels.
Maybe make the smut take a backseat in your stories and focus more on the plot or what ever genre you're writing in. Like let the romance build up over several chapters, before finally letting the smut happen.
Try looking up different fics and stories from different authors to see how they write and what makes their stories work. Maybe try asking one of the "Big Shots" from different sites to give one of your stories and ask them of their opinion and what they think could be improved.
But most importantly, Write what you want, because you want to write it.
Anonymous
>>17255187 >Duplica story >Crazy Serena Goombario? Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
Anonymous
Anonymous
Anonymous
>>17255187 Stop writing fanfiction and write something original
Your "problems" are what FF is all about.
Anonymous
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>>17268416 >Your "problems" are what FF is all about. Go on.
Anonymous
>>17268416 I disagree. Pokemon lends itself pretty nicely to creative and original stuff, you just have to be willing to stray away from the super flat cannon characters and the generic copy-the-videogame plots.
I just think writing smut focuses on different things than something more plot driven, and doing one or the other all the time, you're going to be rusty/not as good as with the other.
Anonymous
>>17273542 >you just have to be willing to stray away from the super flat cannon characters and the generic copy-the-videogame plots. And then you get shat on for too much "original" content.
Anonymous
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>>17273878 Eh, I've had a few people tell me it's not their kind of thing, but I can't say I've ever taken much flak for it, and I write some pretty out there shit.
Anonymous
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
New Roxie idea. That other thing will be finished later.
Anonymous
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Do I need to have a tripcode to get people to read my story?
Mothimas 2406-5246-5028 (Magmar, Slugma, Braxien)
Mothimas 2406-5246-5028 (Magmar, Slugma, Braxien) Sat 11 Jan 2014 02:01:48 No. 17279058 Report >>17278458 so that preview thing will be delayed for now?
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
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>>17279058 When are they not?
Butler !!vQF061dDoa/
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
http://pastebin.com/sSUR6d0S Riddled with errors because 2009/2010. I forget. Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>>17285170 >I realize now that I mentioned Duplica who didn't appear for like 3 dozen episodes after this. FUCK ME.
Anonymous
Anonymous
Just read the new chapter of Loving Sisters.
Anonymous
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>>17285170 Still a good read
Anonymous
Rooh
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>>17288846 Hey thanks. Glad you enjoyed it
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
I am going to write the best, most fap-worthy Male Human x Female Pokemon story ever and it's going to cause erections everywhere.
Anonymous
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>>17298601 I am gonna look forward to that.
God speed G. God Speed
Anonymous
Anonymous
I'm looking for MTrainer X FAudino smut does anyone have an--
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>>17233577 >There was another MTrainer x FAudino story involving the dream world. The last thing I remember is that the trainer punched out the dream professor. Fuuuuuuuuuck!!!
Anonymous
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>>17301851 I'm actually wondering if we should start gathering up the good smut stories and save them, just in case more purging should happen.
Pokemon Trainer Kyouhei
all I find is erotic fanfics. people need to make more action-packed fics. those are the ones worth reading.
Anonymous
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>>17301851 O SHIT I know what this guy is taking about. Some Mtrainer is a test subject for Dream professor's machine. Enters dream of his audino, happy to see it. He then loses control of his body (since audino has complete control of dream) and
has sex .
After exiting the dream machine, he comments that the experience was "wet," and then knocks out the dream professor's light out.
Too bad that story got purged, too
Anonymous
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>>17302166 Why not link us to some action packed pokemon stories to get us started, then?
Anonymous
>>17302166 Nobody reads those though.
People just want to jack off.
Pokemaniac G. !!5lyd4F1oWNq
>>17301851 >I'm looking for MTrainer X FAudino smut http://pastebin.com/gfPyHHGu Anonymous
>>17303413 this is /VP/, not /b/. people don't jack off to action. people jack off to the smut people write, pokemon-human pairings, and pokeporn. eww.
Anonymous
>>17308269 Is that sarcasm? I can't really tell.
Anonymous
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>>17308628 I don't even know myself.
Anonymous
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Requestan F-Human/M-Pokémon smut. With the male Pokémon being something besides the seemingly obligatory Lucario, Gallade, M-Lopunny. etc..
Anonymous
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>>17306764 That was a nice read
Anonymous
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New thread soon I believe
Anonymous
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>>17318326 T'was a good thread while it lasted.
Anonymous
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NEW THREAD :
>>17318861 NEW THREAD :
>>17318861 NEW THREAD :
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