>>28384137I really liked it, thanks.
You had a very gentle approach to femdom, and I appreciated that.If you're looking for critique, I'd probably go back and read it aloud (or loudly in your head) to spot a couple of redundancies, if I were you. I specifically remember a short sentence that used the word "Pokémon," several times in quick succession, and that's something that wouldn't come across comfortably if spoken aloud.
I'd also tame a look at some of the tenses and make sure to keep them consistent. There was a little slippage into present tense during the footjob, iirc.
Despite picking up on that, it was a real treat to read, honestly.
>her praises and compliments made him feel nice, making his mind empty and relaxedThis was probably my favorite line in thr entire thing. There's not a whole lot of time for characterization in fapfics, but I really felt at ease with your depiction of Lusamine. Good job.
